Been busy with plotting and preparing this week, so no big revelations or topics for discussion for this entry. Instead, I thought I'd share my query-in-progress for THE ACCIDENTAL WARLOCK, and see if I can get some feedback on it before I send it to the most horrifying place of all.
...no, not the actual querying process. Query Shark. *shudder*
Anyway, I'd appreciate any feedback y'all have to offer. Thank you.
Shiloh Donovan dreams of a book only she can see. She seeks it out, eager for answers, but opening the book frees a disembodied demon. The demon awakens a terrible power within her, a warped and chaotic magic. Shiloh turns this new power against the demon, and banishes it back into the book, but knows she’s in a great deal of trouble. Demonic magic is forbidden in her homeland, under penalty of banishment or death.
On that same day, Shiloh meets Alexi RiLeon. Alexi hails from a powerful merchant family, and has come to broker a deal with Shiloh’s father. Shiloh is drawn to the dark-skinned beauty from first blush, but knows her feelings cannot be requited, as the deal involves Alexi marrying Shiloh’s older brother.
The two women make haste to Donovan Manor, where Shiloh’s parents reveal that she is adopted. Shiloh’s birth parents were part of a cult that worshiped the demon who attacked her; they prepared Shiloh before birth to serve as the demon’s new body. Now the cult has found her, and though she foiled their first attempt, they will stop at nothing to make her the demon’s vessel.
Shiloh takes a portal to her family’s safehouse. Alexi joins her, to offer further protection. But they are too late – the portal sends both women to a distant coastal city. Shiloh realizes only demonic power could have changed the portal’s destination. The cult has people in her house, and now she’s exactly where they want her.
Alexi believes they can hide in her desert homeland, so they seek passage on an airship. She also tells Shiloh she wants to renegotiate the deal so she doesn’t have to marry Shiloh’s brother; Shiloh hopes this means she has a chance with Alexi. But cultists come for them on the airship, and Shiloh’s new powers blaze out of control, sending the ship crashing down. . . .
THE ACCIDENTAL WARLOCK is a young adult fantasy novel of 95,000 words. Thank you for your time and consideration.