I think I can fit a few more commas into that title if I really want. Perhaps I should have added "The Brickening"?
Anyway. This is once again me begging for query feedback. I'm exhausted from training at my new job (mental fatigue is utterly and completely a thing), and I don't think anyone wants yet another blog entry about my plots not doing what they should. >_< Next week's IWSG will, most likely, be a ramble about why the part of the writing process I'm in right now is most likely the worst one, and the part where it's easiest to give up.
But before that, it's another query. I took this one in a completely different direction, focusing more on character like I should have the first time. The first two paragraphs cover the first two chapters of the book, and the third is a summation with much less detail. Thank you in advance for any help y'all can give me.
Shiloh Donovan never wanted to be an airship pilot. Ferrying around rich people instead of studying runes or reading an enormous book is not her idea of a good life. But it’s the life she’s stuck with, until Edwin Figaro steps onto her airship. House Figaro ruined Shiloh’s family ten years ago, but Edwin offers her a job she must keep secret, a journey into magical wastelands. The money could make Shiloh’s life much easier, but is it worth working for Figaro?
Alexi RiLeon knows House Figaro’s secret – they’re smuggling artifacts out of the magic-infused wasteland she calls home. The Figaros ruined her family as well, all thanks to a kiss she shared with Shiloh. When the two women reunite, they rekindle their decade-lost romance, and share what they know about House Figaro. Together, they form a plan to get revenge on Figaro for ruining their lives.
But the wastes hold more secrets than Shiloh and Alexi anticipated. House Figaro is allied with a group of minotaurs who seek the powerful runes that created the magical wasteland. The minotaurs want to recreate their long-lost empire with that ancient magic, and they’ll start their conquest with Shiloh’s home city.
Airships, blackmail, and ancient magic collide in THE BOOK OF LOST RUNES, a fantasy novel of 80,000 words. Thank you for your consideration, and I look forward to hearing from you.